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　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China
     
　　With the rapid development of modern society, an increasing number of people are concerned about the issue of reform of medical care in China. At present, most people argue that medical care is too high and it is difficult for persons to go to the doctor.
    
　　In my opinion, some driving reasons that lead to the above mentioned problem can be illustrated as follows. To begin with, the best doctor in China work in a few big city .what's more, patients like going to the big city to go to the best doctor .At last, the level of people's life in Chain is lower in modern society and the persons cannot affort to give medical care.
    
　　Based on what has been discussed above, it follows that some solutions should be found to solve the problem of reform of medical care .On the one hand, the level of people' life is promoted as fast as possible by the government .On the other hand, the government is bound to develop more doctors .Only in these ways can we improve development of reform of medical care in China.

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