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　　There is no denying the fact that city problem is a hotly debated topic in China today. Reports are often heard about population and pressure resoulting from city problem. Actually, the  phenomenon has been so widespread that it has caused nationwide concern.

　　A number of factors might have led to this problem, but the following are the critical ones. In the first place, growing population is cause problem of mankind who need more food. Besides the noise and rubbish of people are sources of pollution. In the second place, the boom of chinese economy in the past decades has brought about a lot of employment pressure in this country. Last but not least,by city problem, ones may increase the distance between the poor and the rich.

　　Personally, I believe that we should not go to extrems on this matter. We may find out a balance of country and population. And it is my belief that only by placing man and society on an equal basis can we expect to have a lively and colorful word.

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