同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文原文

　　The increasing persons come into the city, and a few problems comes out. Nobody could have failed to notice the fact in the past few years. But it appeared in our eyes this years. Such as job ,housing, see a doctors , education and so on.

　　The abvious questions are include work, lodgings, medical treatment,and the youngs’ education and so on. More and more people come into the city ,The government must support more workplace for them, If the rate of job is low , people can not solve the subsistence problems ,it will result crime . with increasing person into the city ,More housing must to be supplied .and the last but not least ir the youngs’ education ,It is also a serious question. Student must study in their hometown in China .so if they want to study in the city they must pay more money. But it is not fair.

　　On my views of these problems which is refered in the front . the government must do something to keep all of the person in fair,such as  gave some lolicy to keep most of them have enough palce to live ,give all of the youngs can get the enough education,etc.

　　評(píng)語(yǔ)：7分。
   
　　文章內(nèi)容總體上符合題目要求，結(jié)構(gòu)上三段式也較好的呈現(xiàn)出文章的總體思路。但是全文語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤較多，表達(dá)不夠地道，有較多的中式英語(yǔ)；有的句子比較混亂，意思不明。第二段對(duì)問(wèn)題的說(shuō)明層次不夠清晰。建議以后多加強(qiáng)語(yǔ)法方面的訓(xùn)練，同時(shí)多讀優(yōu)秀范文，增強(qiáng)寫作時(shí)的語(yǔ)感。