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　　The Robot Is a Machine After All

　　Mr. Black is an engineer,and Robot is his intellectual machine .One day, Mr. Black played cards with Robot.At first, Robot played very well. He won a lot of money of Mr. Black’s. He looked very happy.

　　Owing to losing money, Mr. Black felt very upset.“Don’t I must be defeated by a machine?” Mr. Black began to think.Suddenly,he had a good idea. Mr. Black opened Robot’s chest and began to oprate. A few minetes later, Mr. Black stopped operate.

　　Now  Mr. Black played cards with Robot again. This time the consequence turned over. An increasing number of money was won by Mr. Black. Mr. Black began to smile,and Robot looked vety sad.“Ah, The robot is a machine after all!” Mr. Black thought.“The world is controled by mankind  still.A lot of study work must be done to develop Robot.”

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