2015高考英語作文寫作技巧:典型錯誤及對策(3)
【重復(fù)累贅】
累贅句：I can speak fluent English fluently.
簡潔句：I can speak fluent English. I can speak English fluently.
累贅句：Just as the saying goes"every coin has two sides,"it is the same with the private cars, that is to say, It has its disadvantages.
簡潔句：Just as the saying goes, "every coins has two sides,"so does the private cars.或 Every coin has two sides, so does the private cars.
對策：英語有一個原則叫簡潔原則(又叫經(jīng)濟(jì)原則)--能用三詞不用四詞。平時進(jìn)行長句
短寫訓(xùn)練，學(xué)會用省略的方法使句子簡潔明了。寫作完成后，要認(rèn)真檢查，看有無重復(fù)累贅句。
【句式結(jié)構(gòu)單一，無連接詞】
結(jié)構(gòu)單一句：I'm Li Hua. I'm a middle school student. I'm from China.
修改句：I'm Li Hua, a middle school student from China.
結(jié)構(gòu)單一句：You practice more reading, you will improve your reading ability.
修改句：If you practice more reading, you will improve your reading ability.
對策：學(xué)會恰當(dāng)使用連接詞、同位語、非謂語動詞、短語等對結(jié)構(gòu)單一的英語句子進(jìn)行合并，進(jìn)行簡單句和復(fù)合句的轉(zhuǎn)換訓(xùn)練，逐步掌握較復(fù)雜句式。
【"高級表達(dá)"誤區(qū)現(xiàn)象】
過多使用所謂的"高級詞匯"、"高級語法結(jié)構(gòu)"如：
For so many years'tough studying, I have conquered English. I totally master English. I can speak magnificent English. And I want to make my voice be widely heard throughout the world. So I want to take part in your summer camp.
剖析：考生雖然很認(rèn)真地使用了"高級詞匯"：tough，conquer，master，magnificent等，但因為不夠簡潔準(zhǔn)確，有的用詞也不符合中學(xué)生的身份，反而使語言啰嗦，晦澀難懂。
修改：I've been learning English for many years, and I speak fluent English now. What is more, I'll be able to tell students from other countries something about China and learn about their countries as well. I hope I will be accepted as a mem ber of your summer camp.
又如：I strongly hope that this plan should be carried out continually not only because it has given us more space to develop our critical thinking and independent ability but also because we really feel much happier than ever before.
剖析：該句用詞 39 個，包含了一個賓語從句，兩個狀語從句，太冗長。
拆分修改：I strongly hope that this plan should be carried out continually because it has allowed us more space to develop our critical thinking and independent ability. What's more, we really feel much happier than ever before.(一個主從復(fù)合句、一個簡單句，連接詞使句子流暢連貫)
對策：使用詞匯、語法結(jié)構(gòu)應(yīng)該簡潔、準(zhǔn)確、恰當(dāng)、通俗易懂，少用生僻詞，不要為了所謂的"高級結(jié)構(gòu)"而牽強(qiáng)使用，走出所謂"高級結(jié)構(gòu)"的誤區(qū)。對于冗長啰嗦的長句子可運(yùn)用拆分省略法，使其簡潔有力。
總之，只要我們針對高考英語書面表達(dá)中的典型錯誤，采取必要的對策，在老師的指導(dǎo)下扎實訓(xùn)練，高考中有針對性的檢查糾正，就一定能夠降低出錯率，提高得分檔次，增加高考獲勝籌碼。
(責(zé)任編輯：盧雁明)
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