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　　There is more and more people who swarm into the big city, such as Beijing, Shanghai, Tianjing and so on. Some people hold the positive view. They claim that it is a good thing. Others, however hold the opposite view. At the same time, some questions will occur with the increasing population.
     
　　Personally, I believe that both sides have something right, we have to admit that a big city can help a person to some extend. For example, they can obtain the better employment occupation, and their children can accept the excellent education. But a series of problems will come into being. Kids go to the nurse school, which they can elect the nearest one. Then they go to elementary school, junior high school and senior high school. This is not an easy thing. The first place, the child faces the select school, and the same time the school can receive him. The second place, children will take part in university exam when they go to the high school. They cannot accept the fairly competition because of their permanent residence. 
     
　　To sum up, we should not go to extrems on this matter. When it comes to education, opinions vary from person to person. As far as know, Beijing is differ from others in college entrance examination.

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